Needs more of an establishing shot, that mid with the flare would be good if you held off the audio a little bit. Don't need so many cuts from him coming off the phone and putting on the gloves, if you had him walk towards the gate a little and paned around with him then a close up of the gloves in one shot that would've been nice. also perhaps a perspective shot from the corps as he climbs the stairs, really drag it out. That tracking shot was nice but could've been improved if again it ended with the victims face. Think about the start and end to your shots. reaction shot to the phone ringing was missed but the rest is solid, the slow zoom was nice too. Had an overall feel of a thriller so good job.
Needs more of an establishing shot, that mid with the flare would be good if you held off the audio a little bit. Don't need so many cuts from him coming off the phone and putting on the gloves, if you had him walk towards the gate a little and paned around with him then a close up of the gloves in one shot that would've been nice. also perhaps a perspective shot from the corps as he climbs the stairs, really drag it out. That tracking shot was nice but could've been improved if again it ended with the victims face. Think about the start and end to your shots. reaction shot to the phone ringing was missed but the rest is solid, the slow zoom was nice too. Had an overall feel of a thriller so good job.
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